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Welcome to my dungeon ~ book reviews, musings and education relating to erotica, graphic sex and more. I love gentle pain mixed with rough pleasure.
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Sudden Sex: 69 Sultry Short Stories
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Well, I gave up for this to be officially posted by TRR.Interested in porn without a plot? This one will fit the bill. This is a collection of four short stories with neither beginning or ending. Each story is written with just a middle part filled with depraved sex acts. It's hard to review this collection as there pieces missing - such as a plot and editing.
The collection does contain hot sex scenes. They are written in first person and sometimes third person. There is an abundance of ass fucking which is always a treat. For spank bank material, this could be a choice.
Here's the reason why this book is rated so low. It is difficult to read. It's not the material covered. It's the writing. There are numerous run on sentences as well as poorly written scenes. The first story is a conceited male vomiting his bitterness and speaking the reader in an annoying manner. The following stories made little sense. It seems the connection between all these stories is something to do with men in a warlock order. It's never fully explained. It seems to be just an excuse for wild orgies.
An example of poorly constructed sentences in need of an editor is as follows.
Another sing-song accent, Germanic rather than Lusophone, immediately accompanied by the heavy tread of two pairs of big feet—obviously they weren’t waiting for Trajan’s permission—and before I knew it Trajan had yanked his dick out hard, making my hole sigh and spasm up a ream of his cum, and he’d lifted himself up on his knees on the bed, said weight release allowing me to turn and raise my head just enough (despite exhaustion and the still reverberant echoes of intensely pleasurable pain from being so masterfully fucked down like the whore I am) to espy a long, well-muscled and heavily hairy white torso beside me, and even furrier trunk legs with a half-hard left-leaning thicker-near-the head baton of a pink uncut dick that—blink and it happened—let loose with a few hard sprizzles
followed by a stream right at my face. (p. 14)
This is an inexcusable abuse of the comma as well as the dash sign. This kind of stream of conscious writing is difficult to follow and only causes a reader to cease reading. My recommendation, hire a better editor if the rules of grammar are a mystery. The dialog between characters are amusingly similar to bad porn. Since none of the characters are developed at all, this collection is categorized as porn without a plot.
*I received this book as a review copy in return for an honest review